The "old man" returns. (An allegory in 3 parts)
This is a searing psychological study in progress.. The protagonists are well drawn, and the narrative moves very quickly. I like trying to penetrate their thought processes and characters. Both are mysterious, but she more so because even though one cannot help but see them as opposites, she is almost fatally drawn to him, but is he drawn to her? Or, is he just trying to get revenge on her and torment her for her unwillingness to convincingly stand up to him.
She has so little regard for herself as to keep trying to convince herself that he’s right in saying who else does she have, and how can she live without someone who is always there, even if it’s only to perpetuate a co-dependent and toxic relationship.
References are made to her dark side and commonalities with the man, but she knows deep down that she absolutely has to permanently get away from him and his seedy, manipulative behavior.
I find it difficult to fathom how she could have possibly been drawn to him in the first place. In essence, she’s only marginally stronger than he is, but that is enough to create a huge amount of tension and suspense as the plot deepens!
On to Part 2 :)
I completely get it. I'm trying to learn about how to be more intentional with my writing. I know it will help so much in the long run. Just getting myself started is the hard part,lol.
Every time I read this story, I love it more
Hi Theresa! I just wanted to pop in and say you are a great writer! I've only had a chance to read just this part of the story but it is really good. It pulls you in, makes you feel so many emotions, and makes you want to stay around and see what happens next. Keep up the great work and can't wait to see what you write next! :)